The Simson School

Hello I am 박주원 and I’m in 샘물감마M. Today I’ll talk about my favorite motto. I started learning playing piano when I was 7 years old. I met a great teacher and she taught me that playing piano could be fun. When I was in first grade, I went to my first piano concours, but I didn't win. It was a good experience and I was proud of myself for trying hard. I made myself a special award that night. My parents said it was an awesome performance and they were really proud of me. I have received two awards from the concours since then. I won't give up. I will always do my best, so I can be proud of myself.

Comments: Great! I think this is a good lesson for all of us :) Very few mistakes~ Just try to make sure you capitalize your ‘i’s! If you have any questions about the corrections ask in class ^^;

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Total: 20/20 A+