The Simson School

 In Korea, students can't get much sleep because they need to study at night. To pass the test, they need to study at night even on holidays. Even though they study hard during daytime, they can't pass if they don't study at night. So, many people drink ?caffeine to keep themselves awake. I have tried once in a camp. I didn't sleep for the whole night so I can play, but once the lesson started, I couldn't be awake because I didn't get any sleep. I am not a short sleeper, so I need a full night's sleep.

   My body gets tired when I have little sleep. Instead of studying, I can't concentrate on studying and fall asleep. If we don't sleep, our brain cannot refresh and rest, so our body feels tired. As a result, our body rests automatically. In fact, we can see lots of people who sleep in school because they are tired. Because they sleep in school, so they study at night. And the negative cycle goes on and on. Many people drink coffee to keep themselves awake. Also, because they keep on drinking caffeine, their body becomes addicted to caffeine. It can lead to lots of problems such as insomina. Few hours are not enough for a child to sleep. I sleep at least 8 hours regularly. Sometimes, I sleep 10 hours a day. Even though I sleep a lot, if I break the cycle and don't sleep a lot, it is hard to do my job. When I break the cycle, I begin to feel drowsy and sleepy at school. It is not good to be caught while sleeping, so I try to sleep unnoticed.

   Therefore, I feel like I need more than 8 hours of sleep a day to keep me awake and to not get caught sleeping in the academies. And, I think that I need to sleep regularly to prevent getting health problems. Newspaper articles are showing that less sleep can lead  to many  health problems. At last, I want to ask you a question. Do you have enough sleep? And do you really have a good night's sleep?

 In Korea, stud?ents can't get much sleep because they need to study at night. To pass the test, they need to study at night even on holidays. Even though they study hard during the daytime, they can't pass if they don't study at night. So, many people drink caffeine to keep themselves awake. I have tried caffeine once in a camp. I didn't sleep for the whole night so I can play, but once the lesson started, I couldn't be awake because I didn't get any sleep. I am not a short sleeper, so I need a full night's sleep.

   My body gets tired when I have little sleep. Instead of studying, I can't concentrate on studying and fall asleep. If we don't sleep, our brain cannot refresh and rest, so our body feels tired. As a result, our body rests automatically. In fact, we can see lots of people who sleep in school because they are tired. Because they sleep in school, they study at night, and the negative cycle goes on and on. Many people drink coffee to keep themselves awake. Also, because they keep on drinking caffeine, their body becomes addicted to caffeine. It can lead to lots of problems such as insomnia. Few hours are not enough for a child to sleep. I sleep at least 8 hours regularly. Sometimes, I sleep 10 hours a day. Even though I sleep a lot, if I break the cycle and don't sleep a lot, it is hard to do my job. When I break the cycle, I begin to feel drowsy and sleepy at school. It is not good to be caught while sleeping, so I try to sleep unnoticed.

   Therefore, I feel like I need more than 8 hours of sleep a day to keep me awake and to not get caught sleeping in the academies. And, I think that I need to sleep regularly to prevent getting health problems. Newspaper articles are showing that less sleep can lead  to many  health problems. At last, I want to ask you a question. Do you have enough sleep? And do you really have a good night's sleep?

Comments: Good job! I'm impressed with the corrections. Just watch out for your spelling next time.

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