The Simson School

Hello my name is Kim dae-hwan. I’m going to talk about what person I like to see give the commencement speech. It is 안철수. I admire him because he has three jobs. First, I admire him because he has four jobs. At first, he was a doctor, and later he became a computer programer who protect computer from computer virus. Thirdly, he became a professor at the KAIST. And finally he is politician now. I think he is so genius. Second, I admire he because he is so smart. He went to the Seoul University. But he finsh his college, and he made computer vaccine laboratory. And give computer vaccine for free. Finally, I think he is challenging. If I was he I will be a doctor. But he do many choices. I think he is smart, challenging. So I admire him, and I want to see him and get the speech.

Hello, my name is Kim Dae-Hwan. I’m going to talk about what person I would like to see give the commencement speech. It is 안철수. I admire him because he has three jobs. First, I admire him because he has four jobs. At first, he was a doctor, and later he became a computer programmer who protects computers from computer viruses. Thirdly, he became a professor at the KAIST. And finally, he is politician now. I think he is a genius. Second, I admire him because he is so smart. He went to Seoul University, but he finished his college and he made a computer vaccine laboratory so that computer vaccine are for free. Finally, I think he is challenging. If I was him, I would be a doctor. But he had many choices. I think he is smart and challenging. So I admire him and I want to see him do the speech.

Comments: Does he have 3 jobs or 4? I think you used a good choice of vocabulary, just be careful of your spelling.I think it's great to have someone to admire!

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